Listen and evaluate)

I would immediately like to make a reservation.that I do not know how to sing, but I had to do the best. I am more interested in the question of the musical component (how it is perceived by people whose people I do not know) and the question of the text (how do you like the song in itself).
It is interesting to know your opinion and, perhaps, hear advice.

1. Mystery – Intro

2. Mystery (Clean)

3. Mystery (With voice, breakdowns, inept transitions and fake notes. Listen to your own risk. I warned)

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The music rolled out unequivocally. See https://nongamstopsites.uk/ some videos on YouTube by vocal, and there will be a topchik in general (especially about the output of sound, the position of the larynx, the attack of sound and the work of the diaphragm).

But these are not bad, even vocals are not as terrible as it happens. To practice – and it will be fine, the voice is very suitable for this music.

Hm. I’ll make a reservation right away, I’m far from the genre (and indeed I love it, when several instruments sound, I am always not enough for me), I don’t understand the music in music Further in order: further:
1. Intro I didn’t like it. On the one hand, this is normal, I never like it. On the other hand, there is a specific claim. Some kind of emptiness occurs periodically. It’s as if they had pressed the key, and they just hold. And this emptiness is much. As for me, it is worth it to either reduce these “pauses”, or fill them with something. I want an orchestra but I understand that the idea is crazy))
2. Here it is already norms I still did not understand how I relate to low tones, but I did not come up with any arguments, so I just note. Here, for example, at 2:50 there is such a introduction, and there it is just “pu-bo-bo-boo boo”, somehow monotonously. I don’t know if at least something is clear in this, well, maybe the musicians will figure it out))
Otherwise, a good melody. I did not have enough power (I want the same orchestra), in places it sounds empty, I would like the composition to open more. And then again, it sounds a little monotonous.
I don’t know what to give as an example, so let it be here. Now, if from 3:22 turn on, and compare with the entry, you can hear the melody straight. And there is some kind of horseradish enters. I don’t know what it is, but I like it in a symphony))
https: // www.YouTube.COM/Watch?V = QScvuonkowa
In general, it sounds quite familiar. However, I still did not understand what to compare with. Something climbed into the head of L’AME IMMORTELLE, MANTUS, LACRIMOSA, but this is all wrong. Crusty if I think of something else, I will say.
3. Well, they warned about vocals. The text is preliminary-the hell knows well, and it would be interesting for me to hear the same composition already finished so that there is more than one tool and vocals more powerful and so I don’t make out everything, so I can’t judge for sure. Now, if the text version is still, I would say more precisely.
I haven’t come up with anything else)

And so he worked with what was at hand, since I never came across programs, and did not have to. And at hand, I will have only a mobile phone, for recording, and piano.

Well, the draft turned out to be good)) As they say, good luck and inspiration to turn it into a finished work

But there are no familiar musicians? It is difficult to play all the parties yourself (although possible, I know), and it would be possible to do something like a group.

Well, yes, they wrote about the vocals correctly – the voice itself is good, if you practice, maybe you will not have to look for a vocalist)

Here the problem is not so much in that it is difficult to recoup yourself, you can learn, but in the absence of what to play on. Now I’m trying to solve the issue programmatically, but it is difficult to give it especially when you don’t know where to start. Therefore, I decided to upload my notes here, otherwise the material has accumulated in a couple of years and at the same time I am in some kind of dead end and I understand well what to do next, all the more so that there are no friends of acquaintances.